A boat sails quietly, moving into glory,
glory makes us beautiful,
beautiful is the violin,
violin makes me cry,
crying is a child, one who is hungry,
hungry is the river in which there is a boat,
a boat sails quietly, moving into glory..
a bell sounds a prayer,
a prayer is pure,
pure are the friends,
friends are in the pictures,
pictures are from dreams,
dreams are captivating,
captivating is the sound,
the sound comes from the boat,
the boat sails quietly, moving into glory..
papa gifts a car,
car honks a scooter,
a scooter is paddled,
paddles get broken,
broken is an old chair,
chair comes from wood,
wood makes a boat,
a boat sails quietly, moving into glory..
a baby drinks milk,
milk from her mother,
mother is the daddy of all,
all are innocent,
innocent is the smile,
smile is from memory,
memory makes us travel,
travelers are on a boat,
a boat sails quietly, moving into glory..
ace is not always the ace,
ace is sometimes a joker,
a joker plays a guitar,
guitar sings a song,
song sings the notes,
notes are the guide,
guide is a sailor,
sailor was sindabad,
sindabad the sailor,
sailor sails the boat,
boat makes us travel,
travel through the woods,
wood gives a boat,
boat makes a sound,
sound is captivating,
captivating is the picture,
picture is of a boat,
boat is in the river,
river shoulders the weight,
the weight of a boat,
a boat sails quietly, moving in to glory...
10 comments:
nice work ...cyclic style awesome !!!!
it was diffrent
style was novice and the content "not that shallow" as it looks like.
marks for innovation and guts, but someone wud not take the content seriously coz the packaging is so say " child like".
where do u get all these imaginations from... and why the heck u didnt tell me bout this talent in all those 4 yrs...?? im very angry....
@pallav: hehe,actually you wre busy these days,i wanted to discuss it with you,the very article,and yeh eventualy gutsy i am
@lily:forgetful 4 yrs...so no point dicussin it
'forgetful',put it the right way 'mr writer',u din cared enuf to remember
yeah pal,perhaps u know the better half,imean forgetful....its just those last over batting that saved the day, u know what i mean
dat ws little difficult to understand,well4me it ws..thankgod,somu mentioned "cyclic"..els it ws kinda OHT;)bt indeed this is an unusual style of writing,nt expected frm a person having normal poetry skills!hpe readers get the not-so-obvious part of it too!gud going!
pata nahi wat everyone is writin .........i mean their choice but yahan toh comment karo yaar baatein kahin or karna ....... n my turn.......fusing from one to another is cumber some and creates haze.... this one gets along fine... idea is crisp .... been carried all the way n wat i like is multiple casting..... best part it's good enuf to piss BANSI now that u havnt got a rhym to this one...
@sumit:best part of your coment,last line,and on my text,it was actualy written the way it is read,in a go!
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