My earthen pot is empty, please don’t kick it,
Don’t be angry, let it make the noises and all,
He is hungry; also don’t try to feed it with your stuff,
I will myself bring water to my thing,
Please don’t put your drink in it,
My earthen pot is empty, please don’t kick it.
I don’t have a place to keep it,
It will roll down like this on the road somewhere,
For it is the only way to grow,
It will learn, let it go,
I know it’s a little ugly, a little deshaped,
But that doesn’t mean you have to hate it,
My earthen pot is empty, please don’t kick it.
It was so innocent before, don’t know what has struck him,
Now doesn’t take in any drink pure,
Well who is the culprit?
Me who couldn’t take proper care
Or you who always fed my pot with bad air,
Go away you, and smoke else somewhere,
Addiction is getting to it,
My earthen pot is empty…well let it be.
Oh no, oh no, see what you just did,
Once only I thought of not mentioning it, and you kicked it,
Can’t believe you have broken it into pieces,
Ok deshaped, but it was my earthen pot,
Please pick the pieces carefully, it might hurt him,
Its no longer empty, it’s no longer thirsty,
It’s no longer hungry, it’s no longer, it’s no longer…
I can’t believe he is gone now, I am left all alone,
My pot, my earthen pot is gone,
Don’t stop me, let me cry, let me scream,
I am sorry my pot,I couldn’t feed you,
I am sorry my son,I had to kick you.
11 comments:
again......... multi cast z awesome ...i love it . messages i dont dig i just like the literature ....and its bang on..
now to get a compliment on literature from you,is enough for me to say thanx yar,finaly a bang on stuff!haha,delite to read this comment!
oh god..wa r u upto dude!!kya ka kya likhta hai..the label of (child,mother) told me in the end where it was actually pointing to,else it ws difficult to link it..mz say gr8 n deep thoughts..!bt plz come out with some positive thing nw..its getting too negative.m sure this world has positive things to talk about too..! :) writing-needless to say,high time u gt smthg publish now!
Omg ..this was just awesome ..Your words made me veil the picture , as though its happening before my eye . Usage of words , emotions , feelings are just perfect ..amazing ..dude , yo are really a wonderful poet and trust me , of so many poems I have read on this concept , this was outstanding !! :)
@aarti: thanx, i think you were just the perfect reader!!! feels good to hear smthng like this from a reader, thanx again!
all the appreciation above has threatened me ,feels lik it's hard to criticise, but i ll try my best.
@RAHUL -symbolism is something in which the reference and the context goes hand in hand, in the above piece the context which is the child n mother thing just pops up in the end n u hav to read the stuff again makin analogies n still reads the reader with some loop holes
Ex- "pot is empty" , cud not comprehend its relation.
The end just pops up as a surprise, the technique used in writing climax.....
@pallav:you got it all ryt,everythng u have scripted was actualy inteded by me,climax was intended,and also i wantd ppl to read it again!remember inception!
many feel the way you have written!its good to see am able to do what i intend!!
well jo cheez pallav ne point out ki usi ko main bang on bol raha tha ......... ur piece z not a manicured garden with strategically placed fountains and canals .......it is rather an outgrown iisland with unexpected springs and waterfall.....thus more basic.....literature ke curriculum mein yeh cheez specialisation mein padhate hain........psychology of writing....
since more basic thus more beatiful
i will take that as a compliment sumit
well it is....!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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